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Flash Fiction, Writing

Trifextra Week Fifty-Three: Four Senses

This week’s Trifextra prompt seeks 33 words of dialogue:

“Oy! You git—I can’t see the television.”

“What? I can’t hear you; TV’s too loud.”

“Stinker—you’re blocking my view!”

“Huh? Get your glasses; any closer and you’d be licking the screen.”

 

50 Comments

  1. joetwo February 1, 2013 4:47 pm

    Nice dialogue!

    • AR Neal February 1, 2013 4:49 pm

      Thanks, Joe!

  2. Sandra February 1, 2013 5:07 pm

    Gosh! This sounds like a night with my grandparents.

    • AR Neal February 1, 2013 5:10 pm

      Hahaha! Love it, Sandra! I agree; it’s either a night with the grandparents, or a night at our house!

  3. atrm61 February 1, 2013 6:19 pm

    (Giggle)so real!

    • AR Neal February 1, 2013 6:22 pm

      🙂 Thank you!!

  4. Jennifer February 1, 2013 7:24 pm

    Oh if only I had a nickel for every time I’ve heard, “I can’t see the TV.” I would have a lot of nickels.

    • AR Neal February 1, 2013 7:25 pm

      Hahaha! So true; in our house, we will often ask if the person inevitably standing in front of the TV thinks he or she is imitating glass…

  5. christina (@finallyMom) February 1, 2013 8:19 pm

    hehe i could totally *see* this interaction

    • AR Neal February 1, 2013 9:52 pm

      Thank you!

  6. lumdog February 1, 2013 8:27 pm

    Haha! Very real dialogue.

    • AR Neal February 1, 2013 9:52 pm

      Thank you so much!

  7. tedstrutz February 1, 2013 10:55 pm

    That’s why I live alone. Good one!

    • AR Neal February 1, 2013 11:01 pm

      Yeah, it’s all good until you have a conversation like this with yourself. But that’s another story 😉

  8. Libby February 2, 2013 12:15 am

    Sounds like my house with a British twist 🙂

    • AR Neal February 2, 2013 1:16 am

      I figured it was a situation to which many could relate 🙂

  9. deanabo February 2, 2013 12:21 am

    Sounds like my kids!

    • AR Neal February 2, 2013 1:17 am

      For us, it’s my hubby and I!

  10. barbara February 2, 2013 12:27 am

    I have a friend wot talks jus like ‘is! 🙂

    • AR Neal February 2, 2013 1:18 am

      Hahaha! I love it!

  11. jannatwrites February 2, 2013 2:19 am

    This sounds about like my husband and me…hey, you haven’t been spying, have you? 😀

    • AR Neal February 2, 2013 2:24 am

      🙂 perhaps your house is the mirror universe to our house…if so, I am so sorry about the dust buffalo behind the couch… 🙂

      • jannatwrites February 2, 2013 2:28 am

        Ohmygosh – you CAN see in my house! (What is that thing living under the fridge, anyway?)

        • AR Neal February 2, 2013 2:33 am

          Meh, whatever it is, one of the dogs will get it…hopefully before it gets them :-/ 🙂

  12. Tom MacInnes (@cobourgcobbie) February 2, 2013 2:34 am

    Congrats on another funny, realistic work of literature! This piece has universal appeal, for sure! 🙂

    • AR Neal February 2, 2013 2:35 am

      Thank you, Tom!

  13. Sandra February 2, 2013 12:01 pm

    In our house ‘touch’ would be the next sense to be employed. Very funny.

    • AR Neal February 2, 2013 3:44 pm

      Oh so true! If only this had been designed to be a 100 word challenge… 🙂

  14. Draug419 February 2, 2013 2:21 pm

    Oh geez…I don’t want to get old lol

    • AR Neal February 2, 2013 3:47 pm

      Eh? Speak up, child! Granny can’t hear you! Hahaha! Unfortunately, the ‘pretending to be glass’ disease can strike early… I remember having it as a kid… 🙂

  15. Corinne February 2, 2013 5:50 pm

    LOL! We were always told that we sat too close to the television. This made me crack up.

    • AR Neal February 2, 2013 8:01 pm

      Same here, Corinne!

  16. Suzanne February 2, 2013 7:18 pm

    Love this! Happens in my house every time I turn on the TV – only it’s usually a dog blocking my view…

    • AR Neal February 2, 2013 8:02 pm

      Hahaha! In our house too, before we let them have the couches!

  17. memyselfandela February 2, 2013 7:55 pm

    Loved this. 🙂

    • AR Neal February 2, 2013 8:02 pm

      Thank you!

  18. oscarjamieson February 3, 2013 8:24 am

    Heh, great dialogue. Well done!

    • AR Neal February 3, 2013 2:55 pm

      Thanks 🙂

  19. trifectawriting February 3, 2013 11:06 am

    Ha ha!! Love it.

    • AR Neal February 3, 2013 2:55 pm

      {gives slightly silly sideways grin}

  20. Sarah Ann February 3, 2013 7:02 pm

    You’ve painted a great scene. Loved it.

    • AR Neal February 4, 2013 12:07 am

      Hank you, Sarah!

      • AR Neal February 4, 2013 12:08 am

        Darned portable devices…”thank you”!

  21. Sandra February 3, 2013 10:09 pm

    One of my major kiddo pet peeves: too loud and too close to the TV. Unless I’m watching TV, of course. (JK.)

    • AR Neal February 4, 2013 12:07 am

      very true!

  22. Bee February 3, 2013 11:21 pm

    This sounds like a typical conversation in my house, growing up.

    • AR Neal February 4, 2013 12:09 am

      Oh, yes, Bee…I heard similar conversations often, which were directed to me usually 🙂

  23. rashmenon February 4, 2013 5:20 am

    Lol !

  24. KymmInBarcelona February 4, 2013 12:05 pm

    Funny. Then not. Okay, funny.

    • AR Neal February 4, 2013 4:17 pm

      🙂

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