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VisDare 8: Very Superstitious

I love the photo this week from VisDare and while I have not attempted to use the prompts to continue a previous tale, I might have to start…However, this is not the week because (as usual) this photo took me in a new direction. I call this 150-word piece “Very Superstitious,” an ode to the great Mr. Steveland Morris.

Belfry bats and sharp bowling balls aside*, Annisa was odd. Evelyn loved her, but even she struggled to keep up with her friend’s latest phobias, quirks, and fears. To say Annisa was strangely fearful was a blatant understatement; her daily rituals and mantras designed to ward off evil spirits were legendary. The girl couldn’t make it from her apartment to the subway entrance without watching for and avoiding anything that even remotely looked like a crack**. The snow made her especially slow in reaching the subway and Evelyn was pissed about waiting. Oblivious to her friend’s anger, Annisa made her way over to hold tightly to Evelyn’s arm as though nothing was wrong. Evelyn settled down and they picked their way to the platform, careful to not bump anyone (another Annisa pet peeve). All was well until the doors opened and Annisa saw the small tabby standing in the car.

Credit: Karishma

* Belfry bats and sharp bowling balls: a two-part mention that includes two old colloquialisms for “crazy” (1. Bats in the belfry and 2. “As sharp as a bowling ball,” which is attributed to the oh-so-philosophical Looney Tunes cartoon character, Foghorn Leghorn)

*Sidewalk cracks can cause untimely death, evidently…

7 Comments

  1. ramblingsfromamum February 24, 2013 9:03 am

    It’s a case of “O oh” what happens next, superstitions, bats in the Belfry – all covered nicely in this piece.

    • AR Neal February 24, 2013 2:32 pm

      Thank you! I might be brave enough to continue the story with VisDare 9…we’ll see!

  2. deanabo February 25, 2013 1:57 am

    You did a really good job with this prompt. I would love to read more…

    • AR Neal February 25, 2013 2:40 am

      Thank you so much, Deana! I am looking forward to the challenge now too!

  3. Angela Goff (@Angela_Goff) February 26, 2013 2:01 am

    And poor Annisa goes through the roof…but how? O my, the poor girl. And poor Evelyn! Interesting how I feel I know Evelyn more by the end of this snippet, even though it’s Annisa she’s talking about the whole time. I see her as long-suffering, loyal, and meticulously observant. Love this!!

    • AR Neal February 26, 2013 2:05 am

      Thank you, Angela! The photo said so much, for sure. I am glad both people shined through…

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