Friday Fictioneers, 8 March 2013: One Mite, Pt. 3

Okay okay. So I mixed up my flash posts last go-round and included Pt. 2 of the story as a response to Picture It & Write. So what; like you’ve never done it {pouts}. Click for parts 1 and 2 if you are interested.

Anywho, we are back on track today, yessiree! And here is a proper, 100-word continuation of Sara-Jane’s adventures:

Courtesy: Jennifer Pendergast

Sara-Jane was able to get through most of the electronic application; fortunately the manager was a bit more kindly than Ms. Text Gumchew. He had come over and chatted with her and as it turned out, was basically interviewing her right then. He told her that he would look over her application but since he knew her story better than the computer would tell it, he had more to go on. It was looking pretty good. To celebrate, she decided to go and buy herself a few work-appropriate items. Spying a sign marked “women’s wear,” she headed for the stairs.

Written for the correct prompt, Friday Fictioneers

(33) Comments

  1. For sure! I remember the stairs in some of the department stores where my Nana would shop when I was a kid; these reminded me so much of those. I don’t know if she was claustrophobic or just scared of the elevators–some of them in those old buildings, with the gates and levers were scary!

  2. I remember those old elevators, complete with intricate gates and a man sitting inside who asked you what floor you wanted. Fun!! This will give her a lot more exercise, enabling her to fit into a smaller size dress. 🙂


    1. Haha Janet! The ones that had an attendant were somehow not as scary. The ones you had to operate on your own were the ones that messed with my head; if something went wonky, there was no one else to blame 🙂

  3. I think you should show the dialogue, not tell of it. And I’m not sure if climbing those stairs would be better than the elevator, but that’s me. 😉

    1. Thanks, Jennifer! I know Rochelle is kind about word counts but I like the challenge of staying within the prescribed; not sure what would have been best to leave out if I’d given the exchange between the manager and Sara-Jane. I’ll have to think on that!

  4. There is so much of our lives on the computers now. From work, to friends, to love, to shopping. Maybe to avoid the stairs next time she could go on eBay? 😛 A great short snippet of fiction, AR Neal! 🙂

    – Ermisenda

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