Friday Fictioneers, 29 March 2013: One Mite, Pt. 6

“Sara-Jane, I’ve been looking all over for you.” Suzannah said in her usually resigned voice. “Papa’s dead.”

Sara-Jane held onto the railing, trying to take in what her sister had just announced. Her father was an unstoppable juggernaut that she imagined would outlive them all; to hear that he had in fact been stopped by something was hard to understand. She grabbed Suzannah’s hand and guided her toward the exit of the store, the desire to shop forgotten. Without a word she walked Suzannah to the rooming house; she sat her down in the sparsely-lit kitchen and waited for more.

Copyright: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Written for the continuing series offered to Friday Fictioneers. Read the first parts here.

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  1. Good morning, AR. I like this phrase in particular: ” Her father was an unstoppable juggernaut that she imagined would outlive them all”. I can well imagine that if he were this type of man that it would be difficult to come to terms with his death.

    janet

  2. I like suzannah’s character on the story and the way she breaks the news to her sister.
    Also the description of the father as an unstoppable juggernaut.
    Very nicely written!

  3. Dear A.R.
    It’s tough to lose someone, particularly someone who’s always been a rock. I loved unstoppable juggernaut. In those two words you painted a complete portrait of Sarah-Jane’s daddy. Nice.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

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